Tuesday, November 20, 2012

100 Word Challenge

The chocolate that talks
It all started when I saw one lonely piece of chocolate but it was not just chocolate it, it, it talked.
But way before I knew it talked I picked the lovely piece of chocolate and put it near my mouth and the chocolate went closer and closer and even closer and then I heard “ahhhhhh don’t eat me”.
 I looked around the room and I was very confused and then the chocolate said again “Hey look down you monster” “hey who, who said that”.
“Me just please don’t eat me!!!”
“Ok I won’t” said the girl but then she was so hungry that she just ate the piece of chocolate.
The End
                please leave a comment and say what I did well and what I need to work on thanks

2 comments:

  1. To Katie
    I liked how you said it,it,it talked. Maybe next time you could add more detail.
    From Courtney

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  2. To KATIE

    That a funny story. What you did well was making
    me laugh and I don't know what you need to work on.

    From LEAH.

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